Mon. Sept. 22, 2014: Anthem Cont.

Today, we discussed question 9 of your "Questions for Analyzing any Text" sheet. I presented starters of student work and then we crossed out what was not necessary (see below for a partial list):

I believe that the Anthem should be changed.

We should the Anthem SHOULD BE kept the same.

I feel as if we the Anthem should be changed.

Personally, I think the Anthem does not have to be changed.

I think the Anthem should stay the same.

I believe the Anthem should stay as is.

My response to this message is that the Anthem should stay the same.

I also explained what passive voice is (and active voice). More information on these can be found in your "15 Common Errors" handbook (#14). Passive voice should be used sparingly.

I also discussed the importance of writing for the reader; what I meant was the importance of choosing your words carefully as the tone could offend them. I gave you guys a handout about tone (it will be in your portfolios if you were not here). You are to have it read actively for tomorrow.
I then gave you the reading, "Political Correctness Laughed off Stage" by Peter C. Newman. You are to have it actively read for tomorrow